✅4. Edit Onboarding flow
Edit and rewrite onboarding copy to align with Voice Guide and seamlessly allow people to set up their account.
Step 1: Phone number
Why I wrote what I wrote
The first screen is filled with place holder text that the founder/developer wrote. He asked me to give the copy some more personality and make it unique to the app.
This was the first draft of my copy. “Rolling” doubles as an energetic way to get people started and captures the idea of “rolling the die” in board games.
Feedback pointed out that “Phone Number” showed up twice. In order to not be redundant, I removed the second sentence and let the input section fill in the rest.
Step 2 :Verification code
I added “secret” to play up the communal/slightly geeky voice of the app.
The 3rd iteration needed a little bit more directional copy.
An alternative message could be: “Enter the secret code we text you”
Step 3: Email
This gets points for brevity, but it’s redundant, boring, and the tone could be interpreted as too commanding.
This needed to sound more colloquial. So I congratulated users and let them know they were only a few steps away from completion like any good game leader/Dungeon Master.
Alternate message: “Cool. Just a little more info”